Monday, March 18, 2013

#VisDare 11 - Whorl with the snails

 

This week's visual dare added tons of fun to my story. Make sure you read all the entries this week!


I pawed the last snail across the fairy ring boundary, making sure to keep my claws pulled in. And people thought herding cats was difficult - sheesh!  I was so sick of the fur and the fleas and the four paw, tail-twitching cat personae.

"Sprite!! I did my part - change me back!"
"Done so soon?" The tree sprite appeared beside me.  He ran his boney hand across my fur.
"Seriously, change me back." I hissed.  "Enough of this bullshit.  I'm freaking starving and I didn't eat any of your damn snails. Change me back!"
"Impatience is not becoming, my dear."
I ground my cat teeth.  "Please."
"As you wish."

The ground beneath my paws quaked and pitched.  Before I knew what was happening, the earth spun dangerously, coiling in on itself like a bathroom drain.  Vertigo wasn't the word; tilt-a-whirl sick was what I was looking for.

(149 words)

7 comments:

  1. Really enjoyed this. The dialogue is fantastic and paints your characters really well.

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  2. LOL! Love this - you captured the moment so well! Something tells me that this still isn't going to end well...!

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    1. I don't think it will end well either; guess it all depends on the prompts. :D

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  3. Looks like neither of my first two posts took - not sure why. But I'm digging this entry - the voice of the POV narrator, the pacing, the eerie sense that the tree sprite still can't be trusted to fulfill a wish the way the girl wants....

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  4. Very nice. Can't wait to see what the sprite does next to string the poor narrator along.

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